literature

a caring thought

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I forgot your smile,
your sinuous stride
and your coy,
yet confident air

when

I catch your gaze
you hold it there, trade
a stare—the constant clamour stops
for a moment
as you give your knowledge
in exchange for a caring thought.
I may add to this but for now, it's complete.
© 2012 - 2024 cardinal-hearts
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TheMoorMaiden's avatar
This has a lovely flow to it, and I like the isolation of 'when'. I also love how the entire piece is just one sentence; it really helps the way that the piece reads and, while of course it is entirely up to you, I think it might be a shame to lose that by adding more to it, unless you manage to add more and still keep it as one long sentence. :)